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It started out simple
A face in the crowd
A shelter for a travler
A picture in a book

The simple life is so good
The taste of bread
The smell of air
And water
And peace

When things come to pass
That should not interrupt life
But do anyway for the sake of fate
Then the mind withers under the weight

I wish...

But nay, it begins anyway
The shreading of innocence
The influence of evil
The bending of his will
Ignorence... Innocence....

No love anymore.
None left to spare for him.

Time drags on mercilessly
Along with evil
Corruptong kills his former self

Hibernation

Disruption from disgused good
He moves once again
Evil seeking evil
But dragging good with it

The good is beaten,
Butchered,
Used,
Lost...

Long this carrys on
Noone sees the good
Thus shuns it
Foolish not to try and find it

But they don't know it's there

Tired eyes open again on a new, yet tortured age
On the evil again
Good also
Scorning also

Will none help?
Someone tries
They are killed
Beaten
Cursed

Evil twists the mind of the innocent
No help anywhere
Another trys,
But is carrying a burden too great
The same evil

No help
No help
Will you?
I tried
I can't reach
Pulled back
Tears
A different story

Finally, twisted and butchered
Driven to the very end
A last thought of the old life
The peace

Then death
But who cares?
You?
Most likely not
It is a hard choice
Many do not make it

Me?
This is a tribute
To all faces in the crowd
Shelters to travlers
Forgotten pictures in books
And him
Yes him

May he find his peace in death
His lost friends
His lost generation
His lost life that could have been

Will you hope for the lost?
Or will you hope for the found?
It is a hard choice
Some make it
Will you?
©2003-2009 ~trisis
:icontrisis:

Author's Comments

Written after seeing Return of the King. They really really screwed up Smegol. THEY LEFT OUT MY FAVORITE PART WITH HIM!!! :cry:

Anyway, this is a tribute for Smeagol.

NOT Gollum.

Learn the difference, jerk.

Just kidding abut the jerk part. ^^; Sorry about that.

EDIT: You may not understand a lot of this! This poem is based alot on personal experiences of mine.

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:iconmeradragon:
what part with smegol do you mean? Curious.

Anyways, nice poem^^

--
English doesn't borrow from other languages; English follows other languages down dark alleys, knocks them over, and sifts through their pockets for loose grammar.
-James Nicoll

I am the butter on the toast of lies!
:iconphantomofnyc:
i love how in writing this you've seem to capture the whole huge crowd but relating it to Smeagol is great. sad creature that's been through more than I care to think of, Makes you think about those who have unbearable pain. and agony. and how often the others just sit on the side.

"Smeagol, Why Does It Cry Smeagol!" oh god *cries* :sadangel: :hug: great poem/tribute, loved it :+fav:

--
" No One Dies a Virgin, Life Screws Us All"
:iconpurplemuffin:
Wow....:clap: Awesome!!! I love your poems!! I think even my picky English teacher would love this!!!!!!!!!! ((Trust me...he hardly reads anything but like...Shakespear stuff..)) Very good very good....:+fav: no questions asked!

--
my pokemon brings all the boys to the yard
they're like
'you wanna trade cards?'
dern right
I wanna trade cards
I could beat you I've got charizard
:icontrisis:
Wha? I'm sorry. I dun't understand the question. :confused:
:icontrisis:
Actually, I would probably fail because of all the spelling errors. >__<
:icontrisis:
Thank you so much! :hug: I really do like writing and poetry, it is just really hard to get my ideas on paper. :writersblock: Oh well.

I am really proud of how this one came out, though. I'm glad you read it, too. It's nice to have some constructive critisism from a good poet like you. :)

Sometimes I just wanna give that little bugger a hug. :hug: :petting:
:iconpurplemuffin:
phht! No problem! Spell check and it's fine! Trust me...when something gets in my head...I do weird things while writing/typing...((If I try to say "with the" I type "withe";))
It's awesome...^_^ better than my first two poems..((One was about Gollum..one was about smeagol...{{Actually one was about the gollum in the Hobbit}}))

--
my pokemon brings all the boys to the yard
they're like
'you wanna trade cards?'
dern right
I wanna trade cards
I could beat you I've got charizard
:icontrisis:
Bwahaha! Yesh, he ish awesome in de Hobbit! ^____^
:iconpurplemuffin:
^_^ but...he's still Gollum soo...the poem is kinda...*shiver* creepy! When I find it, I'll put it on here! ((It was a long poem, too! It was like...2 pages long or something))

--
my pokemon brings all the boys to the yard
they're like
'you wanna trade cards?'
dern right
I wanna trade cards
I could beat you I've got charizard

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